During April 2017 I will be blogging about my Courtship Memories from A to Z . These challenge posts will also be found at Random Thoughts and Tender Mercies http://marcysrandomthoughts.blogspot.com/

Friday, September 9, 2011

Flash Fiction (entry #376)

The door swung open.  Grandpa, home from his meeting, was still dressed in his dark suit and tie. He was an imposing figure with his gray hair and angry blue eyes.
“Young lady, where have you been!”  His loud voice was completely controlled.  “Your grandmother and I have been worried sick about you.”
I looked up from my bed where I had been attempting  the assigned history reading since being banished to my room an hour earlier.  Grandma was standing behind him, and I could see the worry etched on both of their faces. 
“I’m sorry, Grandpa.”
 I hadn’t meant to worry them.   After leaving school, Jon and I had walked the river trail behind the neighborhood.   Hours passed as if minutes while we wandered the wooded area, sharing memories of the California we both loved, now so far away.   Only upon returning home in the late summer dusk had I considered that anyone might wonder where I was.
“Young lady, while living in my house, you will always let us know where you are.  You are grounded.” 
More than ever before, I was missing my dead mother, but I bravely held back the tears until the door swung shut.

10 comments:

  1. Marcy, touching story. By the way, I'm passing along the Versatile Blogger Award to you. Check out this site for info: http://aneclecticmuse.blogspot.com/2011/09/and-winner-is.html

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  2. What a sweet relationship... I wanted to know more. Enjoyed it!

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  3. I want to know more. Good job. Mine is #72

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  4. Well written! One suggestion....the background and text are so close to the same color, it's a little difficult to see.

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  5. I enjoyed this scene. Not too many grandparents featured! :)

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  6. Hi,

    I just wanted to let you know I am one of the judges for the campaign & your entry is moving on to the next round of judging. Congrats!

    - Ru

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  7. This is so rich! Loved the imagery.

    And I am in your historical fiction group, though I'm very late in stopping by and following. I look forward to reading your future posts.

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  8. Aw, poor thing. Sad story, but one that indicates a much bigger story.

    Mine is #291: http://thewarriormuse.blogspot.com/2011/09/first-campaign-challenge-flash-fiction.html

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  9. That was a sweet and believable scene. Lots of things this girl is dealing with. If only grandpa could be a little more understanding. Loved the imagery and the way you described the passing of time.

    Excellent job! :)

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  10. This is a moving scene. I really feel sorry for the girl. I really hope things start looking up for her. Great job :)

    I'm #383, http://bit.ly/p1sCwZ

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